Thursday, 5 March 2015

PT3 ESSAY- DESCRIPTIVE


SECTION D

(40 marks)

(Time suggested : 45 minutes)


Question 1

The picture below shows a snatch theft incident which you witnessed while walking to school. Based on the picture given, write about the incident for your school magazine.



When writing about the incident, you should:

  • describe what happened
  • express what you felt
  • suggest ways to prevent snatch theft
  • write between 120 to 150 words. (Follow the limit which is allowed by your school teacher)



Tips On How To write
1.  Read and understand the question carefully.
2.  Find the key words :-
o    For example     : snatch theft, incident, witnessed, walking back to     school, school magazine.

3.   In your essay you need to :-
o    how the snatch theft happened
o    your feelings about the incident
o    to prevent snatch theft

4.  Use the technique to arrange and to write your ideas/points.

5.   Introduction Paragraph – ( 30 – 50 words )
o    Last week – I – walking – to school
o    8.00am – football practice
o    saw – neighbour – Miss Siti – opposite road – waiting for bus
o    she – holding a big brown – handbag

Body - First Paragraph( Describe what you saw happen)
o    saw – a motorbike – two men
o    snatch Miss Siti’s handbag – fell down – screamed for help
o    shocked – gave chase – got away

Body - Second Paragraph( Describe what happened after )
o    checked on Miss Siti – hand and leg – bruises 
o    father came – took her home – made a police report
o    I – felt – angry and sad

Body - Third Paragraph ( Suggest ways to prevent... )
o    People – more careful / alert  - alone
o    More street lights - bright roads / safe
o    Police patrol – in / around – housing areas


Sample Essay
          Cases of snatch thefts are reported almost daily in our local dailies. In some incidences innocent lives have been lost due this unspeakable act.I recently was an eye witness to this dastardly act. The horrifying incident unfolded right in front of my eyes as I was walking to school for my football practice last week.
          The football practice was scheduled at 8.00 in the morning.On that fateful morning, I decided to walk to school instead of taking the bus as I normally did. As I was striding along the brick pavement, my eyes caught Miss Siti, my neighbour, standing on the opposite site of the road waiting to catch a bus to work. She was gingerly holding a big brown handbag in her hand.I waved to her and she waved back to me with an angelic smile.I looked at my watch, it was 7.oo a.m.
          As I strode past her, I saw two men on a motorbike riding slowly towards her.Both were wearing full face helmets. I didn't give much thought about it and just moved on.Suddenly, without warning, they zoomed past her snatching her handbag in the process.Miss Siti fell down onto the pavement. She was shocked but managed to scream for help. It all happened so fast.I gave chase but the thieves managed to escape. They just sped off into the horizon.
          I quickly dashed to Miss Siti's aid. There was a look of bewilderment on her pained face. I helped to check on her.Fortunately, only her hand and leg were bruised but overall she was alright. I immediately called and informed her father about the incident.He drove there as fast as lightning and took her home. Later, they went to the police station to make a report.The barbaric action of the snatch thieves just made me angry. At the same time, sad when I thought about all the unfortunate victims who had fallen prey to them.
         In order to prevent from becoming a victim of snatch theft, people need to be more careful. For example, when they are alone at a bus stop or walking back home alone- alertness plays an important role in ensuring their safety.In addition, the government should put up more street lights so the streets and dark alleys can be bright and safe for the public.Lastly, I strongly believe police presence in and around housing areas would boost public confidence whereby their safety can be assured by the police.

44 comments:

  1. Thank you for the very useful tips. I'm wondering about the word limit though. The question says to write between 120 to 150 words. How closely do we have to follow it?

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    1. This is a bit tricky because it all depends on your school teacher. My advice is ask your teacher what to do and listen to her. MOE has given the guide lines but it's still up to the respective school teachers to allow the number of words for students to write because at the end of the day it is they who are going to mark the papers....

      As for my students I ask them to write 250 words.

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    2. Thank you

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    3. my teacher said we can use more than 150 words.. I wrote 319 words on the pt3 trial

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  2. Teacher can I send my essays to this blog for marking?

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    1. I'm quite busy with my work right now.....but, you can send your work and I can check it for you when I have the time....ok! Send it to this email add

      edu888841@yahoo.com

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  3. teacher, may I ask your opinion on what should I do in order to widen my vocabs? My teacher told me that my vocabs seems to be limited,though.afterall, I'm not a person that can read a dictionary. Plus, if I've got questions regarding this subject, may I email you?

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    1. Reading is one way you could increase your vocab base.For example, read the local STAR newspaper. Look for news about crimes, road accidents, flood etc and jot down the terms used for describing the incidents. You can a scrap book to write down the vocabs...later, go through them and try to use them in your writing...

      All the best...!

      ***You may email me for personal development only not for your school work or school assignments...ok!

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  4. Teacher could please teach me full format for article? :)

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    1. Hi Huda,

      There is no specific format for an article. Writing an article is just like writing a normal essay. Give a 'TITLE' for your article and depending on the question, you can write for example....

      by
      Huda

      at the left end corner of your article.

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    2. Teacher~~~~~where r u now

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    3. I was busy, therefore no time to check on my blog....I'm still quite busy with my lesson plans....Yes, is there anything I can help you with, Huda...?

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  5. Can teacher show how to write Tis essay?
    To make it interesting I mean.

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  6. Teacher show Me full essay pls because although there are notes but teacher wants us to write this essay interesting to be pass up to her.sorry you can don't do it but I need a interesting and A essay so that I can complete my work THX

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  7. Hi how to write the third paragraph ?
    Help me pls��������

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    1. Dear student, let me be firm here....I do not believe in giving fish to my students-no matter how hard they ask for it- I believe in giving them the fishing rod. I just tell them to go fish themselves for I have taught them how to fish and also given one or two fish to them....In current global scenario, one must learn to be independent and not rely too much on teachers for help.

      Therefore, I would strongly encourage all you students out there to give your best and learn from mistakes---to be an expert angler one needs to be very patient and skillful -- same goes with writing an essay....!

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  8. Teacher where r u ?

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  9. I wrote 403 words for my PT3 Essay trials today. The word limit is the same and 4 points were given but they required us to give two more points of our own aswell. I'm wondering if any marks would be deducted? If so, how many and will it effect my grade a lot?

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    1. You have written a very long essay - I am sure your teacher will penalize you because the required words are roughly 180 - depending on your teacher's discretion it can be 200-250 words. Anything more than that is way too long....but, it all depends on your teacher.

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  10. Hi. I would like to ask , what will happen if the picture given is just a normal picture of a family spending time together. And the instructions were 'you and your family is spending time by the beach' and I wrote my own story as in like I made my own story that is not shown in the picture but still relates to the people in the picture. Will my mark be deducted?

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    1. Did you write anything about the beach.....?

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    2. Teacher how can i remember my new vocabs..?for example,when i am reading for a book...the wimpky book.i found one word that i normally seen it before but do know its meaning...i find it in the dictionary but tomorrow i lost everything about it....i'm trying to remember it but i can't..why teacher..?how i can fix my problem to improve my english for my pt3 this year??can you help me??

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  11. Teacher how can i remember the vocabs...sometimes when i don't know about the meaning of the words..i search it in the dictionary but i'm still cannot remember it until tomorrow...why...i don't think that i must always chek out it in the dictionary when i'm gonna to use that word..i mean hear not just one word but more than that...i don't know what i'm suppose to do...especially for my essay...if my vocabs are limited and lack..how can i make the good essay for pt3 this year...can you help me teacher(helpful teacher)..?

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    1. From what you have mentioned I can see that you do really put a lot of hard work to improve your English vocabularies...it's a good start Aiman....but, as you know there's no short cut to success...therefore, in order to improve your vocab-do a lot of reading and writing essays in English and ask someone to check them for you...the best person would be your teacher....All the best Aiman...

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  12. Good afternoon,teacher.I am writing essays recently and posted them on my blog.I hope teacher can check and comment about them.
    This the link:
    http://studytogether1234.blogspot.my/search/label/PT3%20Essay

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  13. I write this essay and hope teacher can check it.

    Snatch theft cases have been bandied about by the public.Local dailies also shows that the number of snatch theft cases escalating and ringing alarm bells across the country.Recently,I became an eye witness of this cruel action.The incident just occurred right in front of my eyes.

    It was a windy day and I was walking to my school for my extracurricular activities.I was striding on a leisurely way as the weather was favourable.On the opposite road,Mrs. Tan,my neighbour was waiting to catch a bus for work.I waved to her but she did not notice me as she was engrossed texting on her handphone.I continued my walk to school.

    On the opposite direction of road,there was a motorcycle coming furiously.Their faces were covered with helmets.I did not give much thought about them as I was going to late to my school.Out of blue,the motorcyclist zoomed past her and the pillion rider snatched Mrs. Tan's handbag.She had butterflies in her stomach when she felt a strong tug on his handbag.She tried to get back her handbag.He held her handbag strongly.Mrs. Tan screamed at the top of her voice for seeking help.The pillion rider kicked her in cold storage and they successfully snatched her handbag.

    I was stunned at that moment.I could not think of anything.However,I managed to note the registration number of the motorcycle.I quickly ran to Mrs. Tan and tried to lend a hand to her.She was in trauma.Her arms were bruised.I quickly decided to call the police and lodged a complaint.I also called Mr. Tan,her husband to bring her back home.Mr. Tan,drove his car as fast as lightning and arrived at the scene in the nick of time.He brought his wife to the clinic which is a stone's throw from that place.

    I was frightened by the incident.Upon walking to school,I was thinking about the incident.I was sad for Mrs. Tan and at the same time angry with the thieves.They were willing to harm the other for money without humanity.I hoped not to be a witness of this incident again in the future.

    Safety precautions have to be taken in order to prevent from being a snatch theft victim.Snatch thieves usually home in women who become a sitting duck.In order to be safe,women should learn martial arts to protect them.Besides,we should not walk in deserted lanes alone.We should also be on the lookout of suspicious people.Lastly,do not flaunt money and valuable in public places.As the saying goes,prevention is better than cure.

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    Snatch theft cases have been bandied about by the public.Local dailies also shows that the number of snatch theft cases escalating and ringing alarm bells in this dog-eat-dog world.Recently,I became an eye witness of this cruel action.The incident just unfolded right in front of my eyes.

    It was a windy day and I was walking to my school for my extracurricular activities.I was striding on a leisurely way as the weather was favourable.On the opposite road,Mrs. Tan,my neighbour was waiting to catch a bus for work.I waved to her but she did not notice me as she was engrossed texting on her handphone.I continued my walk to school.

    On the opposite direction of road,there was a motorcycle coming furiously.Their faces were covered with helmets.I did not give much thought about them as I was going to late to my school.Out of blue,the motorcyclist zoomed past her and the pillion rider snatched Mrs. Tan's handbag.She had butterflies in her stomach when she felt a strong tug on his handbag.She tried to get back her handbag.He held her handbag strongly.Mrs. Tan screamed at the top of her voice for seeking help.The pillion rider kicked her in cold storage and they successfully snatched her handbag.

    I was stunned at that moment.I could not think of anything.However,I managed to note the registration number of the motorcycle.I quickly ran to Mrs. Tan and tried to lend a hand to her.She was in trauma.Her arms were bruised.I quickly decided to call the police and lodged a complaint.I also called Mr. Tan,her husband to bring her back home.Mr. Tan,drove his car as fast as lightning and arrived at the scene in the nick of time.He brought his wife to the clinic which is a stone's throw from that place.

    I was frightened by the incident.Upon walking to school,I was thinking about the incident.I was sad for Mrs. Tan and at the same time angry with the thieves.They were willing to harm the other for money without humanity.I hoped not to be a witness of this incident again in the future.

    Safety precautions have to be taken in order to prevent from being a snatch theft victim.Snatch thieves usually home in women who become a sitting duck.In order to be safe,women should learn martial arts to protect them.Besides,we should not walk in deserted lanes alone.We should also be on the lookout of suspicious people.Lastly,do not flaunt money and valuable in public places.As the saying goes,prevention is better than cure.

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    1. You have written quite a lenghty essay. Good for you Sathya...

      1)Snatch theft cases have been (bandied) about by the public- what is "bandied" in this context.
      2)Some of the words used do not fit in or are inappropriate.
      3)Sentence structure and grammar needs improvement.
      4)Use appropriate adjectives...

      *Overall it is nicely written...keep up the good work and all the best...!

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    2. Bandied means discussed by the public

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  15. dear madam, thank you for your sharing. i want to ask you on the last question in pt3 exam. it is on the novels. is it a compulsory question? as in my school, we never have a single question on the novel in our previous exams. i hope you may clarify on this. thank you.

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    1. Yes, it is a compulsory question and I am not a madam(lol).

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    2. Thank you for your sharing, it is really helpful. May i ask you a favor? i have a problem, which i do not understand clearly about the novel, how i met myself. how should i write it to get full marks? thank you in advance.

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  16. Sir/madam can i know?? Article essay same with another essay or not

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    1. Article

      1. Must have a 'TITLE'
      2. Writer's Name/Signature
      3. 5 paragraph essay

      That's all....

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  17. hello madam is there any tips for pt3 this year

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  18. hi,I'm really appreciate this essay.So,can i ask if 'I witnessed the incident,so how should i do?"and what should i express for the feeling

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    1. You're welcome..as for your question,you can read my sample essay above.

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  19. Whenever I write an essay,I have trouble controlling the number of my words and keep writing 370 to 500+ words (And sometimes more which annoyed and impressed my teacher at the same time)
    Any tips on how I can write shorter essays?

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    1. My suggestion :-
      Intro - 20 words
      Point 1 - 35 words
      Point 2 - 35 words
      Point 3 - 35 words
      Conclusion - 25 words

      Total words of 150. Now, this is just a simple format which you can try and use.

      Ask your teacher how many words (max)she would allow you to write and then do your own arrangement...ALL THE BEST!

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